‘The Dragon Legacy’ was my entry for last year’s ‘SYTYCW’ competition run by Harlequin/Mills&Boon. It was also the first novel I’d written for twelve years. I really enjoyed the whole experience especially the fantastic group of writers that I met there. Many of whom are now Twitter and Facebook friends.
My entry didn’t final and wasn’t picked up by the editors but I did have some really useful feedback from other writers. The main consensus was that I had built my paranormal world well but that I had too many characters in the first chapter and it was difficult to identify the hero and heroine. I took this feedback on board and re wrote the first three chapters with these comments in mind.
In January this year I decided ‘The Dragon Legacy’ was ready for submission and I entered a Twitter pitch for Crimson Romance. I was asked to send my full manuscript. After just over a month I received a standard rejection letter and was gutted. However this is all new to me so I wanted to treat it as a learning experience.I emailed back and politely asked for feedback. The feedback I received was that I had made a number of beginner mistakes in my submission.
One of the suggestions to correct this was to find a critique partner. I had read numerous articles on the writers’ craft but I have to confess I didn’t understand all that was said. A chance conversation on Twitter with one of my writer friends led to her offering to read ‘The Dragon Legacy’. Her enthusiasm and suggestions made me decide to rewrite parts of the manuscript. It seems I was a typical head hopper for Point Of View (POV) something my rewrite has rectified.
I am much happier with the story now and hope to find it a home in the coming months.
I have a Facebook page for ‘The Dragon Legacy’ and a Google+ page called ‘My Books’ so I have decided to post parts of the synopsis and snippets from ‘The Dragon Legacy’ there in the next few weeks. My hope is that people will check them out and let me know what they think. Some of you will know that I love Pinterest and there are links on both pages to my Pinterest board for ‘The Dragon Legacy’.
Here is snippet from Chapter 1 …. not posted elsewhere.
‘Absorbed in her appraisal Fleur didn’t see Lukas slant a glance in her direction. The look of rapt absorption, he surprised on her face stilled his breath. She was looking at him hungrily, as if he was a delicacy she would love to taste. The sound of his blood thundering echoed in his head. His eyes flared with passion as arousal exploded in every inch of his body.The uncomfortable tightness of his designer jeans; a testimony to his body’s readiness to act.
Belatedly he realised he’d stopped talking in mid sentence. Jasmine was looking at him expectantly in the rear view mirror, her green eyes full of laughter. What was he saying? The power of speech had deserted him. His body unconsciously leaned into Fleur’s, anxious to give her, what her eyes said she wanted. No. Not here. Not her. Fleur was too innocent for him.’
Watch out for the snippets and let me know what you think. 🙂